Friday, July 12, 2019
The anonymous feedback for Even An Ox. Thank you.
Why did you have to do that too me? Now I have tears in my eyes. This is a heartbreaking story. The only way you could have made it worse is to have Babe the Blue Ox die instead. Really touching stuff.
For once, a size-related story that takes the square-cube law into account. Rather sobering. The story conveyed Ellen's grief well.
One of a few bittersweet tales in this batch about a long-married couple dealing with the deterioration of health due to size changing, in this case, his giganticism. Their believable, loving relationship was the absolute highlight of the story, done exceptionally well.
I cried when I read it. And when I reread it. I'd share this with my friends outside the fetish without embarrassment.
Devastating. "His furnace grew cold." It hurts worse because your dialogue was so good and we feel the weight of the relationship. I want ten thousand more words with these two. My favorite story of this batch.
A touching tale, very good.
Fantastic evocative emotional story that killed me a little on the inside
The dialogue was sweet and snappy, and it helped to build the relationship into something very believable (and subsequently tragic).
It is as sweet of a story as it is sad. The tale of the last days of Paul, a giant man, and Ellen, his caring wife. You’re introduced to their idyllic way of life, but there’s a letter that deeply worries Ellen. We get to see how they keep interacting with each other, joking and loving each other, until we get the revelation on what was all about that letter. Then, it’s all sad in a sudden. The last days of Paul are an exercise of denying the truth as they are of love and care. How they want to make this worth it until the very last breath. Besides, there’s the furnace metaphor, Paul’s body heat, how comforting it is for Ellen… until it expires. It’s moving in many ways; it makes you feel cozy with their love and bringing tears in your eyes with the tragedy.
This was beautifully done, the first time a size fiction story made me cry. Bravo.
Tragic story, well written characters, this story rocks.
elegiac; superb; emotional & real; death scene was incredibly moving; an unexpected story;
Though I'm dead inside so I felt no feels, this was a beautifully-told tale. Execution was spot on.
Excellent use of limited space. I really felt the love and chemistry between Ellen and her husband. It kept with the theme of Gentle April and you seamlessly wove in just enough back story to make me feel like I really knew the characters. I was completely sucked in and felt a connection to them. I wasn’t expecting to cry over such a short piece, but I actually teared up at the end. The dialog flowed really well and the only mistake with grammar or punctuation I found was right after “I don’t want you to go.” The word “Tear should be Tears.” Aside from that one word, I really don’t have much to offer in the way of constructive criticism here. Nothing stands out to me that I would recommend changing. Nice job.
I'm a grown man, dang It! Why am I crying so hard. It's just dusty. Shut up! No, you're crying!
Mostly dialogue, and very good; genuinely heart-tweaking; no real explanation for his death but it wasn’t really necessary, I don’t think; these are real people in love and in pain and in pain love with each other. Reminiscent of, of all things, On Golden Pond. This is just wonderful.
Ties with another entry for 'Most Heartbreaking Size Lit 2019.' Beautifully written and immersive, although I did see where it was going to end up ahead of time. If the end would have come as more of a shock, it would have been even stronger. Still good all around though.
Where to start with this one? This was tragic, touching, heartbreaking. I loved these two together and it was sad when the moment came even though the entire story had been building towards that. Whether intentional or not, I got the impression that the wife was always being the gentle one with Paul, despite the massive size difference between them. The byplay was witty and zappy, though I admit I did lose track of who said what a couple of times with the lack of dialogue tags. A truly beautiful story.
It was heart-breaking witnessing the love between the couple as they fought through the knowledge that their time together was ending. Their connection was very well captured in their words to each other. Excellent, intriguing choice also to show the giant as the weaker one, in need of aid, which very rarely happens in size fiction.
I never though "Paul Bunyan dies of cancer while his wife watches" would be one of the best stories I'd read in one of these contests, but here we are. Not a wasted moment or sentence, every detail conveys history. I am going to gush at you once I know who you are, and you're going to LIKE it!
The banter between husband and wife was wonderful, playful, and I could read it again and again. This is one of my favorite stories in the contest. It touched my heart, and deeply. Well constructed, easy to read, never boring; it really touched my heart.
This was just heartbreaking. Great depth of emotions and characters. You really got a feel for these two and the age requirement was well used to give a history to the relationship. This is probably the most emotionally impactful of all the stories I’ve read. You really could feel the love between the characters.
Very emotional story. Great pace, great exposition revealing the world and the background around Paul and Ellen. There’s no question who wrote this one, with its hallmark tension building up and pulling the reader along. The allusion to popular American legend really helps establish the environment as well, very clever device. Excellent work on the dialogue as well, very realistic, illustrating the love these two have for each other. All the more tragic, then, as we come to the end and witness Paul succumbing to his own body, Ellen unwilling and unready to let him go. Very few writers bother to pack this much emotion into a tale. Well done all around.
[Written for Gentle April '19 part of the SizeRiot contests. Illustrations by Morganita. If you'd like to thank her for her work you can do so here. If you'd like to commission your own art you may do so here.]
Even An Ox
copyright 2019 Taedis
|Paul gathering wood for his cook fire.|
The letter was for Paul, but addressed to Ellen. An awkward compromise, but there was no practical alternative. It arrived the last day of August when Paul was in the deep woods gathering trees for his cooking bonfire. Paul preferred being alone in the woods to being gawked at by the mailboat pilot.
Ellen read the letter three times before Paul strode out of the forest carrying an armful of freshly plucked trees. Roots longer than her body dry-dripped a trail of dirt behind him. Ellen used to joke they looked like backwards carrots once he stripped the branches.
Ellen tried to tell Paul over lunch, but she chickened out.
Sunday, July 7, 2019
Back when I was a kid I saw this wicked cool book at the local bookshop. I never picked it up, but I flipped through it every time I went to the store until it wasn't there one week. Flash forward 30+ years and that book has become a bit of a cultural touchstone for people in certain subcultures.
If you've heard about The Super Dictionary you probably heard about in relation to Lex Luthor stealing 40 cakes which was a thing among the aforementioned subcultures. But that was one entry out of thousands.
What about the dozens of entries that featured some sort of size content? Asked no one ever. Until now.
I'm going to skip the giant animal entries and focus on ones that feature actual human shrinking or growing. Spoiler: The Atom features prominently and PETA would not approve.
|It doesn't take long for us to get into some solid size content as we learn|
about one of The Atom's lesser known powers -- bee etiquette.
|I've never seen Atom with a piece of tape around his finger, have you?|
|Pretty much sums up the problems being a shrunken superhero. |
Spoiler: we see that cat later on. It's like a story arc written by someone
who'd read of the concept in online forums.